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eugene123 發表於 2005-4-11 17:50:07 [顯示全部樓層] 回覆獎勵 閱讀模式 2 2380
請英文好的人幫我看一下,這篇文章的文法哪邊有錯,謝謝。

I was wrong

I am not a Catholic,
but why I always say: "Oh! ! Jesus. "

I do not really love you,
but why I so miss you while everytime i feeling lonely.

My English is so poor,
But why I always writing a secret diary in English while injured wholeheartedly.


I was wrong,
after I know everything about you clearly, I know that I am wrong.

Then I have vomitted,
when I see the another side behind you clearly, I vomitted sickly.


Woman !!
you getting wrong, fault is it treat my emotion to other man the same eyes to spend in you

The man does not only feel about the sweet woman like you that sexual desire runs high

not about sex, not about occupy, not about compete with the other.

What I want is " love ", the truly love is experienced I wanna give you.

A simply sense in my arms.


The goddess in my heart is collapsed

My heart has sustained a severe injury too
I'm no longer believe the ture love any more.



Sorry ,i am so sorry.........
I am cardialgia,
Maybe, I have really fallen in love with you.

that's why i am so distressed.

[ Last edited by 夕陽武士 on 2005-4-11 at 11:29 PM ]

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tyc 發表於 2005-4-13 13:42
I will give it a shot - hope it helps.
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I was wrong

I am not a Catholic,
but why I always say: "Oh! ! Jesus. "
but why do I always say "Oh Jesus!!"

I do not really love you,
I don't know if I really love you,
but why I so miss you while everytime i feeling lonely.
but why do I miss you so much whenever I feel lonely.

My English is so poor,
But why I always writing a secret diary in English while injured wholeheartedly.
But why I still write my diary in English even when my heart was boken into pieces.

I was wrong,
after I know everything about you clearly, I know that I am wrong.
after knowing you, I know I was wrong.

Then I have vomitted,
Then I felt sick,
when I see the another side behind you clearly, I vomitted sickly.
when I saw your other side, I felt sick.

Woman !!
you getting wrong, fault is it treat my emotion to other man the same eyes to spend in you
看不懂!!!
The man does not only feel about the sweet woman like you that sexual desire runs high
看不懂!!!
not about sex, not about occupy, not about compete with the other.
Not making love, not owning you, not competing against others,
What I want is " love ", the truly love is experienced I wanna give you.
what I want is "love", the experience of true love that I want to share with you.

A simply sense in my arms.
看不懂!!!

The goddess in my heart is collapsed
看不懂!!!

My heart has sustained a severe injury too
After the severe trauma experienced by my heart,
I'm no longer believe the ture love any more.
I no longer believe in true love.



Sorry ,i am so sorry.........
I am cardialgia,
I am heart broken.
Maybe, I have really fallen in love with you.

that's why i am so distressed.
And that's why I am so distressed.
bryanDB 發表於 2005-4-15 18:24
看起來像詩詞之類的
如果是這樣的話那我應該就只改文法就好了

Woman !!
you getting wrong, fault is it treat my emotion to other man the same eyes to spend in you
you are wrong, your fault is treating my emotion with the other man the same eyes to spend in you

The man does not only feel about the sweet woman like you that sexual desire runs high
The man does not only feel the sweet woman like you, but his sexual desire also runs high

not about sex, not about occupy, not about compete with the other.
Not making love, not owning you, not competing against others,
What I want is " love ", the truly love is experienced I wanna give you.
what I want is "love", the experience of true love that I want to share with you.

A simply sense in my arms.
A simple sensation in my arms.

The goddess in my heart is collapsed
The goddess in my heart has collapsed.
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